10th Annual Halloweensie Contest Entry

10/28/2020

Update: A SCARE A SKULL A SKELETON won 4th place in the contest!

Here's my entry for the always FUN Halloweensie contest, from Susanna Leonard Hill. This year's challenge was to write a children's story, in 100 words or less, containing the words skeleton, creep, and mask.
How'd I do? Leave a comment below (treats only, please; no tricks).

A SCARE A SKULL A SKELETON

a scare
            a skull
                        a skeleton
                                    I clatter down the street

a creep
            a crawl
                        a caterwaul
                                    I’m knocking for a treat

a rant
            a rave
                        an open grave
                                    I wear a scary mask

a trick
            a treat
                        a something sweet
                                    I TAKE! (and NEVER ask)

a bugaboo
            a witch’s brew
                        the treat I took is cursed…

a salty lick
            a yuck
                        an ick
                                    my brother is the WORST!

a snore
            a sleep
                        a sneaky peek
                                    a tippy-toe attack

a spider…
            SCREAM!
                        its Halloween
                                    and—yep!—I got him back

45 Comments

Linda Hofke

10/29/2020 02:52:18 am

This is great, Heather. Fun story, good pacing, wonderful alliteration and meter.

Good luck!

Heather Kinser

10/29/2020 11:13:35 pm

Thanks Linda. That means a lot coming from you! I'm thrilled that you stopped by to read.

Kalee Gwarjanski link

10/29/2020 03:27:10 am

Great job! Feels so sneeky

Heather Kinser

10/29/2020 11:14:41 pm

Thanks for reading, Kalee. This was a fun one to write! Good luck, if you're competing.

Ashley Chalmers link

10/29/2020 03:36:01 am

Oh wow, this is so perfectly executed. Fab job, Heather!

Heather Kinser

10/29/2020 11:16:05 pm

Thanks for sharing a comment. I had such fun writing this.

Sarah link

10/29/2020 06:26:13 am

Great rhythm, pacing and alliteration. Your ending surprised and made me laugh. Well done!

Heather Kinser

10/29/2020 11:16:38 pm

Sarah, thanks for stopping by to read and comment!

Colleen O Murphy link

10/29/2020 06:51:28 am

Great job with your entry!

Heather Kinser

10/29/2020 11:17:04 pm

Much appreciated! Thanks for reading.

Gabi Snyder link

10/29/2020 08:26:09 am

Spook-tacular, Heather! The rhyme, rhythm, and imagery are perfection and I love your surprise ending!

Heather Kinser

10/29/2020 11:18:51 pm

Hi Gabi. I'm so excited to know that you like it! Thanks for dropping in to read and comment. I was definitely inspired by the lovely dactylic word "skeleton"--what a great launching point for a spooky story.

Deborah A Buschman link

10/29/2020 08:34:21 am

I just love it. So clever and a great ending.

Heather Kinser

10/29/2020 11:19:33 pm

Thanks so much, Deborah. It's lovely to hear from you.

Kelly Conroy link

10/29/2020 09:02:26 am

I love this! So suspenseful and fun to read!

Heather Kinser

10/29/2020 11:21:08 pm

Kelly!!! Thanks for reading and commenting. You are the BEST at this. I double-dog-dare you to submit a story this year.

Connie Bergstein Dow link

10/29/2020 09:26:51 am

I love the story, the wordplay and the format!

Heather Kinser

10/29/2020 11:22:01 pm

Connie, thanks for the story love. This one was FUN to write.

Jenna Waldman link

10/29/2020 09:34:05 am

This is fabulous, Heather! Very creative!

Heather Kinser

10/29/2020 11:23:14 pm

Hey Jenna! Thanks for dropping by with a comment. Are you competing this year? (If so, I'd better run and hide.) I will keep an eye out to see if you post.

Melissa Miles link

10/29/2020 12:42:23 pm

I love this! So clever.

Heather Kinser

10/29/2020 11:24:56 pm

Thanks very much, Melissa. How wonderful of Susanna to offer us this inspiring prompt. We're so lucky to have her putting logs on our writing fires.

Sarah Meade link

10/29/2020 12:44:38 pm

This is AMAZING! I loved reading it aloud. So much fun with wonderful word choices and a rollicking rhythm.

Heather Kinser

10/29/2020 11:26:47 pm

Thank you, Sarah. I'm so encouraged by your comment!

Jill Lambert link

10/29/2020 06:10:20 pm

I love the format and sound of your story. Your use of internal rhyme and alliteration made it so fun to read! Best of luck in the contest, Heather!

Heather Kinser

10/29/2020 11:28:00 pm

Jill, thanks for commenting. Knowing what's working well helps me be a better writer. I'm glad this story is hitting the right notes!

Mary Ann Cortez

10/30/2020 10:37:07 am

Love It! This one made me laugh out loud. Great format, felt like I was walking down the street. Very clever!

Shelley Walden link

10/30/2020 07:23:50 pm

This is great! The rhythm is gorgeous. I love how you formatted it, too :)

Heather Kinser

10/30/2020 10:45:16 pm

Thanks so much, Shelley. I appreciate the comment.

Maria Marshall link

10/30/2020 07:49:00 pm

Such a fun format & and what an 'evil' trick at the end. Poor spider!

Heather Kinser

10/30/2020 10:45:55 pm

Maria, thanks for dropping in to read and comment.

Jilanne Hoffmann

10/30/2020 10:37:51 pm

Fabulous story! This one gets my vote!!!

Heather Kinser

10/30/2020 10:44:44 pm

Jilanne, nice to see you here! Thanks for reading and commenting. I'm so glad you liked my offering.

Nancy Derey Riley

10/31/2020 05:14:09 am

Love your rhythm, word choices. You captured the feel so well. Great job!

Monica E Acker

10/31/2020 06:04:44 am

This is fantastic!

Patricia Nozell link

10/31/2020 06:40:53 am

Wow! So descriptive & a fun twist at the end! Great job! Happy Halloween!

JEN Garrett link

10/31/2020 03:22:33 pm

Those darn brothers deserve to be got! Fun story, happy Halloweensie!

Chel Owens link

11/1/2020 08:13:45 am

Great rhyme and story! I liked it!

Jill Burns

11/1/2020 09:45:16 am

Cute, clever, and so much fun to read! Great word choices! I loved the ending!

K Fischer link

11/1/2020 11:51:02 am

Great rhythm, it was a lot of fun to read out loud!

Jenny Buchet

11/1/2020 03:13:45 pm

Great story, Heather! Good luck

Diantha Litwer

11/1/2020 04:33:16 pm

LOL! I love getting brother back with the spider.

Virginia Neil link

11/2/2020 02:19:22 pm

So much fun and exactly the way I remember it. I love the form of your poem and your meter and rhyme are spot on.

Bonnie Kelso link

11/2/2020 05:09:15 pm

What
a
fun
entry!!!

Good luck with the contest!

Lauri Meyers link

11/3/2020 05:41:12 pm

Love the structure and the assonance!

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